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It dangled a little, that was all. *shrug* But maybe it's just me. And I tend to have long opening sentences. XD

That? Was brilliant . At this point I realize I'm just repeating everyone else, but seriously, this poem was a joy to read and, I'd guess, say, since I could ...

I am my father's daughter. It is an accusation on my mother's lips and a mockery on my father's; it is also true. Because I cannot touch him as I ...

I love this. It's a fantastic beginning. Only complaint: I'd like more follow-up on the sunniness of the day the asteroid hit, or else for that sentence to be cut. ...

Mine is more or less slightly disguised exclamation. ;) I did sense shades of Shakespearean ordering, etc., and it's probably worth noting that I think the last line was the ...

I enjoyed that a great deal. This day is gilt in silver, where once the light was gold, And all around me minute droplets hang upon the cold. Its shimmering ...

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Also pleased that the lizard/girl comparison created an image of someone lovely, which was the intention. :'D

Way to, um, tear down religion without giving any evidence for what you are, theoretically, advocating. The foundation for this poem is flawed. Do you mean it as a purely ...

Hm. When I was done reading this poem, I felt cheated. It was a perfectly good starting point, but the imagery was sparse, the slightly inverted common sayings weak; the ...

You know you're a writer when your doodles have footnotes.

Thank you so much for the critique! Glad you liked most of it. :'D I did in fact mean 'chick' as in the baby bird - not sure how a ...

Thanks so much for reviewing! Yes, the speaker was a mere assumed character, although come to that I could change 'work' to 'school' and 'girl' to 'woman' and it might ...

Of course, on the downside, my review will be half to six tenths opinion, more general than specific, and not necessarily tactful. I do line-by-line breakdowns on occasion, if I ...

This morning before you drove me to work, I noticed that You remind me of a lizard sometimes, (e.g. now): it's hell trying to pry you off your chair (or ...

I WROTE AN EMO VILLANELLE. I am so proud of myself. (Relevant to the discussion? What do you mean?)